Some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others thinks they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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in their later stage of education. On the
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, studying children all the
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would increase their depth of knowledge and they can embark into the ocean of learning.
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, they can find out the different field of the world which will eventually elevate their experience.
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, they can identify which subjects they like to choose as a profession due to an incorporating many subjects.
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, The Guardian reported that 85%of pupils are more capable to find out their hidden talents by studying all subjects.
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view argued that studying all subjects are waste of time and hurdle to become a successful. They think that a
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to get the chance to all the subjects are interesting to the pupils of young age. I do not agree that they should be restricted in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • discover their interests and strengths
  • basic understanding
  • interconnected world
  • higher motivation
  • deeper knowledge
  • mental health
  • reducing unnecessary stress
  • boredom
  • balanced approach
  • successful specialization
  • well-informed perspective
  • solid general education
  • freedom to delve deeper
  • specialized future career path
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