Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both side.

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People have different
view
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views
regarding whether the school ought to focus in competition or in cooperation as a team. On one hand, children who learn to compete in school often do better, according to some. They learned to develop their skills and be confident. They performed well during competition to others that may result of better performance on their works.
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, they strive hard to do better when they competing with others. They feel
challenge
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challenged
whether they have direct competition with their classmate.
Furthermore
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, it
is commonly believe
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is commonly believed
that
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is
important part
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the important part
an important part
that will help them later in life, as
adult
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an adult
adults
. They most compete against other in
job market
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the job market
.
On the other hand
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,
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it is
it's
often thought
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was
better if children focus on cooperating with others in a team. People don’t live alone, we
always dealing
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are always dealing
always deal
with each other. So learning
this
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kind of skills will be beneficial for their future.
Another
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Other
reasons why
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helpful for them to develop their personality as well dealing with others, negotiating and confronting conflicts in
constructive way
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a constructive way
constructive ways
, that they might encounter in the near future. In conclusion people think they need to become more competitive whereas
other
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others
think
it
it is
it's
best for a child to focus on working together as a team.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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