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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that volunteering should be made part of the school curriculum.
This
 essay agrees with that suggestion completely because of the benefits it brings to pupils. The essay will discuss how these extracurricular activities are valued by universities and employers. Education should not be limited to strictly academic pursuits and those in education should
also
 develop life skills,
such
 as teamwork, empathy and self-discipline, and one of the best ways to hone these aptitudes is through community service. Serving those less fortunate than ourselves teaches us many lessons including how to job with people from other backgrounds and the value of hard performance.
For example
, I personally volunteered to spend 6 weeks in Africa teaching disadvantaged children and
this
 led to a much higher production ethic when I returned to my studies. Many colleges and companies are
also
 increasingly looking for
this
 type of experience. Most school leavers have the same grades and charitable works can help set you apart from the herd.
For example
, Cambridge and Oxford receive thousands of applications from straight-A students every year and can only accept a small percentage of applicants. What you have done outside the classroom is often the thing that differentiates you from everyone else and gets you that coveted spot. In conclusion, teenagers should be made to partake in unpaid industry as part of their schooling because it will help them learn things they wouldn’t ordinarily learn from their teachers and it will
also
 boost their chances of getting into
third
 level education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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