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with an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face conversation will be a thing of the past. To what extant do you agree

#population #internet #text #face #conversation
people
Suggestion
People
 had communicated with each other
face
 to
face
 in the
past but
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past, but
 now people structured with the busy working scenario,
moreover they
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moreover, they
 get practice to communicate with the
internet
such
 as email,
skype
Suggestion
Skype
, video calls,
watsup
Suggestion
wats' up
wats up
waits up
watts up
 etc.. , while they do not have
chance
Suggestion
a chance
the chance
 to meet each other. I totally agree with
this
 statement. There are compelling reasons
for agreeing
Suggestion
for agreeing to this
this
 statement.
Firstly due
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Firstly, due
 to the development I the information and
communication
 technology, the increasing number of people
prefer
Suggestion
prefers
 to
contact
 each other through modern tools.
For example
, people for the sake of work, education purpose moving to a different region and countries far away from their place,
therefore
, they
can not
can not
cannot
 communicate
face
 to
face
 with their family, spouse, friends at all, while they are in
contact
 through a video
calls
Suggestion
call
 and
skype which
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Skype, which
Skype which
 is really helpful to the long-distance relationship
moreover
, it will take the
communication
 system to another level
such
 as easy access without time waste, share the message of these convenient facts growing
number
Suggestion
numbers
 of the population willing to
contact
 via
internet
.
However
, there is another embarrassing side of
this
internet
communication
 which is hardly delivering emotional feeling towards dear one, which might encourage the less understanding in the relationship while it will make a long-distance relationship longer
also
 when considering
internet
 based business which all running without
face
 to
face
contact
 but in all the time it would not give advantages to all citizens there will be a chance to make cheat, so, trust among modern
communication
 would be declined. In conclusion, evolution of modern technology definitely growing to be in the future due to the fast-moving world,
hence
 the citizens
also
 going to follow the nature of growth and
also
 they will implement those in their personal life, which all habits destroy the
face
 to
face
contact

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