At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large no. of young adults compared with the no. of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the recent years, world population is rising with increasing number of young people; even though, older people is decreasing

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I believe

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it would be

positive development

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a positive development

because older people are less effective for the

countries

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country's

countries'

economical progress than young adults.

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essay will be explained how the benefit of having more younger people will outweigh the on compared to have older people economically and globally. There

are

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a plethora of positive things for the increment of young people

for

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from

any

country

Firstly

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the more younger graduate, the more government will get stronger workforce.If a young adult gets

opportunity

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an opportunity

to higher study, they will contribute to

countries

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the country's economy

country's economy

economy

after graduating; so they will boost the

economy

of the

country

rapidly.

For example

, researchers from Singapore National University found that 75% of

countries

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country's

economic success

depend

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depending

on their younger citizen.

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Secondly

, a young adults are more healthy;

on the contrary

to elder people.They can world 24/7

efficiently which

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efficiently, which

would boost their salary, as well as, their family life will be comfortable.It is

thus

clear that how important a younger citizens for the development of a

country

On the other hand

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nowadays older people are potentially

burden

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burdened

for the society

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;

and there

are

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great deal

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a great deal

of drawbacks

for

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increasing older people in the society.

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Firstly

, their health condition may worsen day by day;

therefore

, they pass their time in depression and health related problem.

Secondly

, the relatives of older people can be felt anxious all the time about them; albeit some older people contribute to the family or community by giving decisions with their earned experiences as well. So that, they are not as important as younger people who can contribute to the

countries

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country's

economy

. In conclusion, despite having the importance in the society decision

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making

based on their experience, older people have no effect in

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the country's economy

country's economy

a country's economy

economy

. In my opinion, younger generations are

essential

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more essential

for the

country

than older people.gg

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large no. of young adults compared with the no. of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce the crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?