You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Once children enter school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developments than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

There is currently a contentious argument over whether
teachers’ impact
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the teachers’ impact
on children is much more significant than their parents’. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
opinion because parents are more aware of the kind of
intelligence
their children
have and children
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have children and
are more exposed to their parents social behaviours.
Firstly
, parents have a greater influence on children’s intellectual
development
than teachers do because parents have better comprehension of their children’s
intelligence
.
In other words
, parents give birth to their children, so they can know exactly how intelligent their children are and what specific type of
intelligence
ability
their children obtain.
Therefore
, parents can choose an effective way to foster their children’s cognitive
development
.
For example
, when my brother was a student, my parents knew that he had
special
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a special ability
special abilities
ability
to deal with numbers and statistics, so they bought lots of books in mathematics to encourage him to develop his mathematical
ability
more.
Second
, children’s social
development
is more affected by their parents than
by
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from
their teachers because students are more exposed to their parents’ social
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Although
children go to school
everyday
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every day
, they stay at home with their parents the rest of their time.
Hence
, they are more
influened
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influenced
by their parents
social behavioral
Accept comma addition
social, behavioural
social behavioural
patterns and habits. To illustrate, in my
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, there is a 7-year-old child whose mother is always
agressive
having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends
aggressive
to other people. Despite of the fact that the child is educated by her teacher that she should be polite to others, she easily gets angry at other people.
Moreover
, she does not greet elderly people and avoids saying thank you when receiving a gift from someone. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the notion that teachers at school have
greater effect
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a greater effect
on children’s intellectual and social
development
once they start going to school because parents have
better understanding
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a better understanding
of their children’s
intelligence
and children’s social
development
is substantially affected by their parents’ daily behaviours. Given
this
situation, It seems that teachers and parents should cooperate in order that they can develop children’s intellectual
ability
and social
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
better.
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