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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.

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It is often said that residential schools are beneficial to offsprings who will be
inhabit
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inhabiting
 at the
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school camp
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school, camp
 or resident house (hostel) through the curriculum.
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, the abstract is not entirely straightforward, and opposite views can
also
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made
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make
 against the perspective.
This
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 essay will discuss the proposition with following
concluded
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concluding
 view of
writer
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the writer
. On the one hand, those who support the children need to be a tenant of
school
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 camp,
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 will encourage them as more mature and independent that the experience can contribute effectively in a
further
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life
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. These range from conception about individual
life
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 to the social community.
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, students responsible for doing homeworks on time, eat properly, and get up at ideal time of the day distribute to time and self-management which can be essential welcome to their
life
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 career. Another argument is highlighted to focus solely on the study with no distracts
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 as house chores and activities are triggered by same ages.
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, those who opposed above statement tend to point out that when the children are far away from their parents or family for a while (average 3 months) which might be makes a homesickness for young ages. Especially, they did not have the same experience as being far before or have
isolophobia
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.
Example
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An example
The example
 can be seen in patient had
mental disorder
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a mental disorder
 known as anxiety that my colleagues found out during the
survey which
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survey, which
 was named ` How did the childhood
life
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 affect to adult anxiety? ` The number of patients responded
their
people in general
they
 parents
compeled
force somebody to do something
compelled
 them to go boarding
school
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 when
patient
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a patient
the patient
patients
 had a fear of being alone and it came down with anxiety after they spent a
years
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year
 under
pressure
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the pressure
 of bullying and not
impartial interaction
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the impartial interaction
an impartial interaction
 of other students. Ultimately, it must be said that giving young ages to boarding
school
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 can be
gist
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the gist
 of complicated diseases. Overall, it would seem that the decision to send kids to
residentual
used or designed for residence or limited to residences
residential
school
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 could be based on their personality and healthiness, rather than on common beliefs that children need to study at
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school
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 among the retroactive perspectives.

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