The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise this information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise this information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first chart shows the amount of
energy
consumed by various activities in an Australian household
whereas
the
second
chart shows the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
resulting from
this
consumption. An average Australian household uses the highest amount of
energy
(42%) for heating
while
water heating consumes 30% of
energy
. Refrigeration, lighting and cooling consume 7%, 4% and 2% of
energy
respectively.
Thus
cooling consumes the least amount of
energy
. Other appliances consume 15% of
energy
.
Energy
consumption leads to
emission
Correct article usage
the emission
show examples
of
greenhouse
gas
.
According to
the
second
chart, refrigeration and lighting emit 14% and 8% of
greenhouse
gas
although
they consume only 7% and 4% of
energy
. Water heating accounts for 32% of the total
greenhouse
gas
emissions
whereas
heating accounts for 15% of the
emissions
.
While
other appliances used only 15% of the
energy
they produced 28% of the total
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Thus
,
greenhouse
gas
emissions
caused by heating
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
considerably lower than
that
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
caused by refrigeration and lighting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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