The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.

The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990.

Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.
The line graph provides information about the quality of three different kinds of fast food consumed in the United Kingdom over a twenty-year period between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
consumption
of
hamburger
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,
fish
and
chips
experienced
upward
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an upward
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trend during the research period.
In addition
, the
amount
of
pizza
that people consumed declined considerably. In 1970, there was a steadiness in the
amount
of
pizza
, on average, people consumed 300
grams
; compared to
approximated
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approximately
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60
grams
for
fish
and
chips
,
40
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and 40
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grams
for
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a hamburger
the hamburger
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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. Between 1970 and 1980, there was a dramatic slump in the quality of
pizza
by 90
grams
.
While
the figure for
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
and
chips
continued to increase to 80
grams
and 150
grams
respectively.
Furthermore
, end of 1980, the
consumption
of
pizza
,
fish
and
chips
were
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was
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at the same
210
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grams
. In 1985, the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
climbed quickly to 300
grams
.
Additionally
, end of 1985, the
amount
of
pizza
and
hamburger
were
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both
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consumed at 210
grams
. From 1985 to 1990, the quality of
fish
and
chips
jumped sharply to 500 and become the highest figure during the research period. At the same time, there was a dramatic
significantly
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in the
amount
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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that people consumed from 120
grams
to 280
grams
.
Moreover
, there was a slight growth in the
consumption
of
pizza
, with a rise of over 10
grams
in just 5 years from 1985 to 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, hamburger, fish, chips, amount, pizza, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • dietary preferences
  • steady increase
  • significant drop
  • peak points
  • economic conditions
  • marketing strategies
  • health awareness
  • public health impact
  • cultural shifts
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