The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.

The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990.

Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph provides information about the quality of three different kinds of fast food consumed in the United Kingdom over a twenty-year period between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
the
consumption
Use synonyms
of
Use synonyms
hamburger
Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
show examples
,
fish
Use synonyms
and
chips
Use synonyms
experienced
upward
Correct article usage
an upward
show examples
trend during the research period.
In addition
Linking Words
, the
amount
Use synonyms
of
pizza
Use synonyms
that people consumed declined considerably. In 1970, there was a steadiness in the
amount
Use synonyms
of
pizza
Use synonyms
, on average, people consumed 300
grams
Use synonyms
; compared to
approximated
Replace the word
approximately
show examples
60
grams
Use synonyms
for
fish
Use synonyms
and
chips
Use synonyms
,
40
Correct word choice
and 40
show examples
grams
Use synonyms
for
Use synonyms
Add an article
a hamburger
the hamburger
show examples
hamburger
Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
show examples
. Between 1970 and 1980, there was a dramatic slump in the quality of
pizza
Use synonyms
by 90
grams
Use synonyms
.
While
Linking Words
the figure for
Use synonyms
hamburger
Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
show examples
,
fish
Use synonyms
and
chips
Use synonyms
continued to increase to 80
grams
Use synonyms
and 150
grams
Use synonyms
respectively.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, end of 1980, the
consumption
Use synonyms
of
pizza
Use synonyms
,
fish
Use synonyms
and
chips
Use synonyms
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
show examples
at the same
210
Change preposition
at 210
show examples
grams
Use synonyms
. In 1985, the
consumption
Use synonyms
of
fish
Use synonyms
and
chips
Use synonyms
climbed quickly to 300
grams
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, end of 1985, the
amount
Use synonyms
of
pizza
Use synonyms
and
hamburger
Use synonyms
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
both
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
consumed at 210
grams
Use synonyms
. From 1985 to 1990, the quality of
fish
Use synonyms
and
chips
Use synonyms
jumped sharply to 500 and become the highest figure during the research period. At the same time, there was a dramatic
significantly
Change the word
significant
show examples
in the
amount
Use synonyms
of
Use synonyms
hamburger
Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
show examples
that people consumed from 120
grams
Use synonyms
to 280
grams
Use synonyms
.
Moreover
Linking Words
, there was a slight growth in the
consumption
Use synonyms
of
pizza
Use synonyms
, with a rise of over 10
grams
Use synonyms
in just 5 years from 1985 to 1990.
Submitted by nguyennhancrazy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, hamburger, fish, chips, amount, pizza, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • dietary preferences
  • steady increase
  • significant drop
  • peak points
  • economic conditions
  • marketing strategies
  • health awareness
  • public health impact
  • cultural shifts
What to do next:
Look at other essays: