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Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, While some people think there are other factors. what other factors should be considers ? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others ?

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In the contemporary era,
success
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the success
 of the
country
 can be measured by economic growth.
However
, some
individuals
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individuals'
individual
individual's
 beliefs that there are other factors as well that must be considered.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss these factors and
then
 describe the most crucial factor among them to measure the overall
success
rate
 of the nation. To commence with the
first
 question, There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of factors that should be considered while measuring the
success
rate
 of the
country
.
Firstly
,
average
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the average literacy level
literacy
level
 of the citizens must be checked and a record should be maintained on
annual basis
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an annual basis
.
Secondly
, one must consider technological advancement in the field of architecture while reviewing the
country
's
success
rate
.
Thirdly
, well established
country
 must have
highly equipped army
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a highly equipped army
 so that they can protect their citizens from any external threat. With regards to the
second
 question, I think
Literacy
level
 of the individuals is the most important factor that I have mentioned above. As the
literacy
level
 increases,
growth
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the growth rate
rate
 of the
country
 increases significantly. They both are directly proportional to each other.
Moreover
, well educated citizens will provide a work force that can work together for the upliftment of the
country
 which in result will boost the growth
rate
 of the nation.
For instance
, a recent
Times
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Time
 Of India report revealed that
current
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the current success rate
current success rates
success
rate
 of New Zealand is about 20
% which
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%, which
 is highest in the world and the reason that they mentioned in their report was the
literacy
level
 of the citizens
that is
 about 80%. In conclusion,
although
 there are lots of other
factors but
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factors, but
 I believe that
literacy
level
 of the citizens in one of the most crucial
factor
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factors
 that must be considered while grading the
success
rate
 of the nation.

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