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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Nowadays, we are witnessing that a growing number of people are opting to live in condominiums and
apartment
 buildings, whereas others still prefer to live in the comfort of their own houses. While both of these accommodations
initially
 seem not much different from one another, there are certain upsides and downsides to each of them. Living in a house would offer many benefits to the household, especially if the family is an extended one.
For instance
, many parents are concerned about having enough living space and simultaneously allocating an area to children's activities. Many houses provide not only enough bedroom and living spaces, but
also
 they may have a backyard or playground in which children can play and spend time.
In addition
, homeowners can freely make improvements to their houses without the need to ask for a permission from building manager which is exactly what is required when someone stays in an
apartment
.
On the other hand
, living in an
apartment
 means that you have more convenience accessing facilities
such
 as guest rooms, party rooms, fitness centre and swimming pools. What is more, one does not need to stress about any maintenance or additional costs rather than the monthly charge
that is
 routinely paid.
Also
 apartments are often located near public transportation which makes them connected to the rest of the neighbourhood
such
 as shopping malls or downtown offices and banks. But in the meantime, there might not be enough parking spaces available to the residents or their guests, which may cause inconveniences when guests are invited over.
Additionally emergency
Accept comma addition
Additionally, emergency
 situations
such
 as fire hazards that require instant evacuation may pose a threat to the lives of
apartment
 inhabitants. In conclusion, when we carefully compare residing in a house to staying in an
apartment
 building, we can clearly see that
although
 apartments offer more facilities and may be more readily accessible, there are some troublesome aspects to them that make living in a house more pleasing and desirable.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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