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More and more work is being carried out by machines in all areas of our lives. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Discuss with appropriate examples.

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Since
last
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 few years,
maching
any mechanical or electrical device that transmits or modifies energy to perform or assist in the performance of human tasks
machines
machine
 are taking crucial part in
every day
found in the ordinary course of events
everyday
 life to do various
duty
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duties
 that
was used
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were used
to done
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to do
buy
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with
by
 human.
This
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 essay will discuss two main benefits including cost and accuracy of
work
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,
also
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 it will mention drawbacks like losing
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job
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a job
jobs
 and increasing competition for
work
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. With
advancement
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the advancement
 of
technology
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work
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 are being replaced by machines because it is cheaper and more accurate. Machines have advance software, so they can do
same
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the same work
work
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 as human, as well as they are
one time expense
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a one time expense
 for any employer. To illustrate- many
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 restaurants have replaced waiters to robots, who
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
 used to serve food, but Now
robot
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the robot
are doing
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is doing
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 in place of
waiterd
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waiter d
. Overall,
employer
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employed
 in all
sector
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sectors
are started
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is started
 using
technology
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 to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
job
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 duties.
Dispite
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Dispute
Despite
,
technology
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 has positive sites, there are some
cones
an argument opposed to a proposal
cons
 of implementing
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 in human life.
Trend
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The trend
 of using
machine
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the machine
 can plummet need of
employee
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employees
, as a
consequence people
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consequence, people
 lose
there
of them or themselves
their
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,
moreover
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, there will be cut throat competition for jobs because of reduced
job
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 availability. For an instance, a recent news article concluded that there is
40% increse
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a 40 % increase
40 % increase
 in
job
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 competition because increased used
of
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in
 robotics. To put simply, machines can make humane life more difficult if they replaced most of human works. There are both plus
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points
 of using
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 as
well some
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well, some
 negative facets.
Technology
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 can be useful but should only replace
work
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 that are very difficult for human as well there should be rules to make limited use of
technology
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.

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