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Governments in many countries are urgently seeking ways to reduce unemployment in rural areas. What are the most effective ways to do this? which measure do you think would be the single most effective step that government could take?

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According to statistics, nowadays, the government is facing increasing
unemployment
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
. There are a number of solutions and my views on the most effective that
government
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the government
 could take. The authorities of many countries have proposed several solutions to help reduce
this
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situation
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 of all, rural workers need skills training because they need professional qualifications and knowledge updates to meet the demands of economic development.
This
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 solution is popular because most industries
now develop
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have now developed
 based on high technology that requires highly qualified workers.
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,
unemployment
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 after graduation is happening,
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, to overcome
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situation
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, the period of vocational guidance in schools, combination between family, school and society is extremely necessary.
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, the government needs to promote searching markets for rural products to increase production demand and create jobs for farmers.
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, exports of products from craft villages
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 as rice and ceramics are consumed abroad. In my opinion, the best solution that all countries can use effectively is governments need to invest in development both in the countryside and in the cities. At the same time, to develop all branches
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 of focusing only a few key industries.
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, there will be more opportunities for employment options and
unemployment
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 rate will decrease significantly. In conclusion, there are many ways to reduce the
unemployment
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 of rural people.
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, to solve
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 problem depends on the financial
situation
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 of each country so it will take a long time to solve. I believe that with the current world development, countries will quickly overcome
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situation
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