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Precautions is better than cure. researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measure. To what extent do you agree?

#precautions #cure #diseases #measure
Today,
field
Suggestion
the field
 of medicine has progressed rapidly. There is
cure
Suggestion
a cure
 for almost all the diseases because of research in treating diseases.
Also
, today doctors promote precautionary measures.
Although
, research and treating diseases is expensive than investing in preventive measures. I believe that investment in research for treating diseases is still necessary. There are many diseases or viruses which cannot be treated at all, like
cancer
. The researchers
have not found
Suggestion
did not find
 any cure or solid reasons why
cancer
 happens. As long as, the cause of
cancer
 is not concrete, preventive measures is not possible.
For example
, my friend had breast
cancer
 and it was because her grandmother had
also
 suffered from the same disease and there was no preventive measure in her case. Preventive measures are a good technique and can save a lot of money and efforts, but only till a certain extent. Preventive measures can be possible only in few cases like
flu
Suggestion
the flu
. There are chances that preventive measures could still fail. As not everyone would take precautions.
For example
, in school if a child has a viral fever and takes precautions so that
its
it is
it's
 not
spread but
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spread, but
 if his friends play with him or touch him the chances that the fever will spread is more. In conclusion, I would say there has to be an investment made in both preventive measures as well as researching and treating diseases. It depends on what type of disease it is if it can cause epidemic
then
 prevention is
better but
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better, but
 if the disease cause is unknown
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 prevention is not effective.
Therefore
, investment in both will help to advance in the field of medicine and ensure human lives are secure.
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