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Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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Academic grade plays a pivotal role in building a successful career.
Therefore
, it is always advised that students should focus on their studies well.
However
, we have seen that many people who have become
successful failed
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successful, failed
 in their school exams.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons behind
this
 scenario and
also
 highlight the factors crucial for achieving
success
 in life. To commence with, I would like to say that
success
 and failure are part and parcel of life.
Success
 surely gives us
happiness but
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happiness, but
 failure provides us
determination
Suggestion
the determination
 and motivation to
work
 hard the
next
 time.
This
 is one of the major reasons why children who fail in school
work
 hard on their shortcomings. Another point to consider is that many kids do not take their academics seriously during their young age.
However
, when they mature, their personality transforms completely.
Furthermore
, some students take interest in other fields like sports, art, music etc.
Hence
, they do not focus on their studies well.
Lastly
, I personally believe that there are a good proportion of people who do not like to simply cram for their exams. They become successful because of their creativity and their desire to do something different. There are numerous factors which help to achieve
success
 in life.
Firstly
, I believe that hard
work
 is the key to
success
. We should
work
 hard and have some patience and perseverance to obtain desired results.
Secondly
, our goal should be clear. If we do not have a clear target, our hard
work
 will be of no use.
Thirdly
, we should not get de-motivated by the obstacles that come in our way. We should try to fight with all the odds courageously. Fourth, we should try to take risks as and when required because they can give you a better result.
Lastly
, we should try to enhance our knowledge and we should keep on learning new things as they can help us in
long run
Suggestion
the long run
. To recapitulate, academic grades are just one of the factors that lead to
success
 and
consequently
, through hard
work
 and perseverance it is possible to achieve
success
 even if one fails at school.
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