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People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this.Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, peoples
life
become
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becomes
 extremely stressed in many ways.
some
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Some
 opine that
this
 is due to the drastic development in technology while others argue
this
 could be due to increased expenditure and competition.
This
 essay will explain
imbalance
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the imbalance
 in work
life
 and lack of physical exercise are the main
reasins
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
rains
 and possible solution for
this
. To start with, due to the frenetic
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 lead by many because of the prolonged working hours
inorder
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in order
 to meet the targets in the
worklife
 many people
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 have a social
life
.
This
 will lead to
elevated hormnal level
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an elevated hormone level
elevated hormone level
elevated hormone levels
 which paves way for
stress
.
For example
 a recent study in the UK showed about 80% of the employees in a company is suffering from
stress
.
Besides
this
 lack of physical activity lead to many disease conditions like heart problems,
obesity etc
Accept comma addition
obesity, etc.
obesity etc.
 which will
also
 lead to
stress
. The possible solutions for these problems is to maintain a proper
workschedule
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work schedule
.
Inorder
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In order
 to attain
this
 weekly once off schedule should be followed and strict office timings must be followed,
This
 will encourage the employees to spend time with family and
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.
Secondly
 a healthy physique should be maintained by following
healthy diet pattern
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a healthy diet pattern
the healthy diet pattern
 and by jogging.
This
 will
inturn
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in turn
 helps to interact with many people
.
Accept space
.
 To conclude,
in addition
 to advancement in technology imbalance
worklife
 and sedentary
lofe
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
 style will
also
 add
stress
. The balance should be maintained by following the schedule and mild exercises.

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