People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this.Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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is due to the drastic development in technology while others argue
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could be due to increased expenditure and competition.
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the imbalance
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and lack of physical exercise are the main
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a rational motive for a belief or action
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. To start with, due to the frenetic
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
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lead by many because of the prolonged working hours
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an elevated hormone level
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elevated hormone levels
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a recent study in the UK showed about 80% of the employees in a company is suffering from
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lack of physical activity lead to many disease conditions like heart problems,
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obesity, etc.
obesity etc.
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lead to
stress
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. The possible solutions for these problems is to maintain a proper
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work schedule
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In order
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weekly once off schedule should be followed and strict office timings must be followed,
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will encourage the employees to spend time with family and
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a healthy physique should be maintained by following
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a healthy diet pattern
the healthy diet pattern
and by jogging.
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to advancement in technology imbalance
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and sedentary
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add
stress
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. The balance should be maintained by following the schedule and mild exercises.

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