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Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Most of the high street shops have reduced its business level downwards.There are many
arguements
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
 in
this
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 resource.From my point of
view it
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view, it
 is a negative development. Due to increased technology, most people do online purchasing.
This
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 may be one of the major reason for the rising fall of the huge business.People don't want to waste their time in
shopping mall
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a shopping mall
shopping malls
 and other areas.They are able to get every
items
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item
 with free delivery.Another reason for
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 may be when people do purchase items
directly they
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directly, they
 always bargain with the sales person.Here they waste their lot of time.
However
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,
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,
for showing their pride and their
position they
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position, they
 are not ready to do purchase things directly. Some items we purchase through online may be
damaged but
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damaged, but
 there is an option of sending back of it to the office within 10 days of delivery. I think
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,
it is surely a negative development
to
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in
of
 a country.It is all because the business people may invest
their
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Their
 huge amount of money over
this
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.The import and export will definitely affect.Through online purchasing people choose different websites to get their products.The main drawback is the variety of products available is less known to them.
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Moreover if
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Moreover, if
 people are not choosing the shopping mall or other high streets for purchasing the country will financially come downward.
This
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 will affect the
busineess
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
 man who do a heavy
busineess and
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business, and
business and
businesses and
 the close their project. To conclude
,
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,
to improve the
socio economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 status the people should do shopping directly from the shops.Reduce the number of online shopping.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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