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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities.

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In an era of, information
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 has become an integral part of each person and we are becoming more reliant on
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 automation in many fields of our lives. While machinery enhances our living standards, I believe it may
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 have a detrimental impact on the way we live every day. One of the clearest drawbacks can be seen in young people’s living habits in the modern age. Children now are spending more time to use
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 devices
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 as computers, smart phones in order to entertain rather than develop their education level.
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 issue has led to a variety of complaints from parents, they think kids should use
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 for useful purposes, particularly, study.
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, misusing automation can
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 harm users if the time and purpose is not logical. Eyesore, CVS,
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 known as computer vision syndrome, or obesity are the examples of unreasonable usage of data processing devices. Despite the disadvantages, it cannot be denied that information
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 has made many aspects of life much easier and more convenient. If we could turn back time, people had to send letters and wait for a long period to receive responses; nowadays, just a click away, we can make a flash connection with everybody around the world thanks to social network. Another aspect worth concerning, is the huge benefits of using means of
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. The Internet is an internal resource of knowledge that students, workers can rely on to to smooth down tasks given. In conclusion, it is clear that there are some harmful aspects of scientific tech.
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, if people take advantages of it sensibly and regular breaks are taken from the devices, there are only benefits that remain.
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