Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays the international touristry is getting bigger year by year
due to
people
are travelling more and more
for having
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new adventures, to view the history and civilization of different
places
. I disagree on
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that
due to
international
touristry
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tourism
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it creates tension rather than understanding between
people
from different
cultures
because when
people
explore new
culture
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cultures
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, they adapt that type
understanding
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of understanding
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of that culture
this
means that
people
get unsurprisingly expect the culture.
Firstly
,
due to
tourism the
people
who explore new
places
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them
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to understand newer
cultures
, get to know
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the values
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of that region or nation,
know
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and know
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new communities.
The international
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International
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travel makes profits for companies,
then
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the government or nations can build new infrastructure not only for local
people
,
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but
also
for international tourists.
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: - young
people
who are mainly exploring new
places
internationally not only travel but
also
for education
also
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such
as students from Asian
people
are going to the United States of America for higher education
this
means exploring more tourist
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sites
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in
this
nation or region. The second main reason is
people
get a real experience that
people
mostly watch in
documentary
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, television and movies. When
people
visit
this
district, they get to experience the atmosphere, feel
the
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nature,
visit
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and visit
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zoos and historical
places
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also
. When someone visits
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a neighborhood
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neighborhood
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like Africa tourist
people
can
also
help the government against the animal hunting currently on
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of
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that zone.
This
can make other
region
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regions
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people
to
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get involved in
this
and create an awareness about some problems. Through
this
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we can conclude I disagree
on
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topic
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that
due to
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international tourism
it
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creates tension rather than understanding between
people
from different
cultures
,
that
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international travel is important to get a greater understanding
about
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different
cultures
.

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Ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly present and summarize your main points. Use linking words and transition phrases to improve the flow of your ideas and make the relationship between them clearer.
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Make sure to fully address the topic question and provide a well-structured response. Develop your ideas further and provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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