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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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The fastest and reasonable way nowadays, to exchange instruction is via the Internet. But it is argued by many that the information which we share on the Internet is not safe and we are prone to
further
 devastating consequences of it.
Although
, it is true, there are efficient and wise ways to tackle
this
 issue.
Firstly
, using the Internet we can send e-mails from one place to perhaps the other corner of the world,
this
 sharing of knowledge through the network is very vulnerable to be attacked and stolen by intruders.
for
Suggestion
For
 example, If an email contains instruction about bank account details of a person
then
 hackers can easily steal these details and unsurprisingly, can use it in their own way.
Secondly
, as the Internet has a huge source of advice on any conceivable subject, children are allowed to make use of it. But some websites are not suitable for the age of the children
for example
, when they visit these sites they can be confronted with the images they are not supposed to see. Even though, there are problems with safety of message sharing on the Internet, there are solutions to mitigate these issues.
First
 of all, Internet providers should make strong security in the network.
for
Suggestion
For
 example, they should protect their networks with firewalls and should install anti-virus programs. Internet users should
also
 update their internet enabled devices with latest antivirus softwares to reduce the chances of getting stolen their sensitive information through internet viruses.
In addition
, children should be allowed to use the Internet in the presence of their parents. In conclusion, Even though, there are increasing cases of hacking and cyber attack on the sensitive information of Internet users by implementing proper measures we can tackle these issues.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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