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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart compares the number of birth and death
rates
 in New Zeeland since 1901 and future expectations until 2101. In 1901, the level of fertility was at just over 20,000,
whereas
 the figures
of
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for
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 death
rates
 were lower,
about
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at about
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 10,000. The number of births reached the highest point at about 60,000 in 1961 and
followed
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was followed
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 by a
wildly
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 fluctuation over a period of 40 years. It is noteworthy that the mortality
rates
 had a steady increase and appeared to fluctuate
in
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at
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 the same time until 2001.
Furthermore
, it is anticipated that there will be 45 thousand newborns in New Zealand by 2101.
However
, in
term
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terms
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 of fatality, the
rates
 are likely to peak at just below 60 thousand by 2061 before dropping back
with
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to
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 a few
thousands
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thousand
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at the end
 of the period.
Overall
, there is expected to be a downward trend regarding the natality
rates
 and
also
 an upward trend among
death
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the death
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 population.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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