In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping center or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

It is irrefutable that due to the
incresing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
global
consumerism most
Accept comma addition
consumerism, most
of the people buy
expensive product
Suggestion
an expensive product
expensive products
from the supermarket or from
mall
Suggestion
the mall
a mall
which leads to the detrimental effects to local shops. It is
negative development
Suggestion
a negative development
for most of the local shopkeeper and
this
essay shall cast light on my perspective. Starting with the reason behind my perspective the prime one is
this
negative growth effect financially to
local shopkeeper
Suggestion
local shopkeepers
the local shopkeeper
. To make it more clear, the lesser the customer in local shops the lesser they earn.
For instance
, if
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of people prefer supermarket to buy essential products it decrease the value of local shops.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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