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Fossil fuels (e.g. coals, oil and gas) are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy (e.g. wind and solar) have been encouraged for use by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

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The
energy
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, which is produced by wind and solar, is more beneficial and less harmful as compare to the power, which is produced by coal, oil and gas. There
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 several reasons to proof that,
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 is positive development rather than negative development.
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, carbon emission is the main drawback of the coals, oil and gas. The
energy
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 is our necessity to deal with our daily household activities;
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, it should be cheap and easily accessible. Yet, a rich natural resource country can make the
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 cheaply with these minerals, but she has to bear the cost of air and other pollutions.
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, these
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 not renewable and can be used for once.
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, if these resources
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 vanished from the earth,
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 our new generation cannot use it in the future, which will make
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energy
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 source more expensive. On the other side of the picture, wind and solar
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 sustainable sources of the
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 production and these
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 not harmful for the environment.
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, these
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 useful for everyone. To get
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 from air, solar and water dam, government or individual need to bear expense just for once, after that they can enjoy the fruit in their whole life.
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, these
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 renewable resources, but there is a problem that gust and solar setup can only be established at the suitable places. To sum up the arguments, breeze and solar
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 suitable according to the weather conditions of the places, but these
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 more acceptable resources as compared to others, because these do not create the any type of pollution in the environment.
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