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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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The chart gives information about
percentage
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the percentage
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 of poor families in Australia during 1999.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the highest proportion of poverty
achieved
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was achieved
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 at types
such
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 as sole parent and single without children,
while
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 single aged
people
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 and aged couples had the lowest one. Single
people
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 amounted
the
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to the
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 greatest percentage in considering
statistic
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statistics
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: 21%-sole parents and 19%-who do not have children.
However
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, single aged persons were just 6% of all. Couples had better results
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 with lonely
people
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. Two humans with babies constituted 12%,
what
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which
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 was equal to 933000
people
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 and couples, which did not have children reached
to
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apply
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7%. The smallest proportion was 4%, which aged pairs had.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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