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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibilities to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment?

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People do understand how critical
environmnet
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 is to us. There has been many campaigns in the recent
years focusing
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years, focusing
 on the conservation and
importance
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the importance
 of
environment
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the environment
. Somehow, there are
individulas
a human being
individuals
 who don't see it as grave concern and don't participate. May be because the hole is not on their side of the boat, but we are all sailing the same boat. Extensive measures should be carried out at different levels to promote and propagate the idea of
significance
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the significance
 of environment. Grass root level campaigns,
for example
 the drawing/sketch competitions in the elementary and middle schools promoting the idea of
green and healthy
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the green and healthy planet
a green and healthy planet
green and healthy planets
planet
.
This
 would infuse a sense of responsibility towards the
planet
 from
very begining
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the very beginning
very beginning
. Government interventions to reduce the carbon footprint. By rewarding the companies that are using renewable resources of energy and not fossil fuels.
This
 creates a competition in the industry and encourages investment in energy efficient products. Each one teach one, being aware of not overusing the electricity and water. Turn off the fan or air-conditioner when not in use, turn off the water tap if running
unnecesarily
in an unnecessary manner
unnecessarily
.
This
 can create a huge difference in the mindset of individuals and instills the idea of
health
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healthier
planet
 in the households. In
conculsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, its the duty of every individual and organisation at various levels to be vocal about the importance of the environment as we only have one
planet
 and we all contribute
in
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to
 it.
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