Today every body use phone, one of the famous technology that grew very fast and covered all around the word. But because of some problem that caused prohibited at some places. Some people agree with this ban some other disagree.

A lot of reason
cause
to people b
e agree
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agreed
agrees
agreeing
with
phone
ban at some places. One of them is that
this
instrument distract people from their e
nvironment
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environment, for
for e
xample at
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example, at
job office you can see a lot of people who are concentrated to own phones and do not attention to their jobs and ignore duties that are responsible about
this
or maybe
cause
that you injured or lost your life by being busy with
this
for substance when you are driving and lost your focus from r
oad
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the road
roads
can
cause
to a
ccident
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the accident
an accident
and tense dangerous for your health. But some a
re not agree
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don't agree
do not agree
with
this
, nowadays almost every t
hings
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thing
is related to
phone
and if i
t
it is
it's
forbidden at a place
cause
you to face problems,
for e
xample you
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example, you
want to transfer money by force and you are a
ppear
Suggestion
appearing
at
phone
ban place it will be hard for you to find another way or s
ome times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
you saved a lot of information in your
phone
and need to have access to them and that it will be hard for you. At the e
nd I
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end, I
am absolutely that using
phone
should not be forbidden at any place and to prevent some problems mentioned a
t
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in
paragraph no.2 and other p
roblem it
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problem, it
is necessary that educate people for using
t
his tools.
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these tools
this tool

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