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Today every body use phone, one of the famous technology that grew very fast and covered all around the word. But because of some problem that caused prohibited at some places. Some people agree with this ban some other disagree.

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A lot of reason
cause
 to people b
e agree
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agreed
agrees
agreeing
with
phone
 ban at some places. One of them is that
this
 instrument distract people from their e
nvironment
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environment, for
for e
xample at
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example, at
job office you can see a lot of people who are concentrated to own phones and do not attention to their jobs and ignore duties that are responsible about
this
 or maybe
cause
 that you injured or lost your life by being busy with
this
 for substance when you are driving and lost your focus from r
oad
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the road
roads
can
cause
 to a
ccident
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the accident
an accident
and tense dangerous for your health. But some a
re not agree
Suggestion
don't agree
do not agree
with
this
, nowadays almost every t
hings
Suggestion
thing
is related to
phone
 and if i
t
it is
it's
forbidden at a place
cause
 you to face problems,
for e
xample you
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example, you
want to transfer money by force and you are a
ppear
Suggestion
appearing
at
phone
 ban place it will be hard for you to find another way or s
ome times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
you saved a lot of information in your
phone
 and need to have access to them and that it will be hard for you. At the e
nd I
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end, I
am absolutely that using
phone
 should not be forbidden at any place and to prevent some problems mentioned a
t
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in
paragraph no.2 and other p
roblem it
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problem, it
is necessary that educate people for using
t
his tools.
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these tools
this tool

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