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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is considered that, living in the 21st century
allow
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allows
 the young to spend our
times
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time
 in many new
places including
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places, including
 big shopping malls where most of the teens waste most of their
times
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time
 in
thus
,
this
 will lead to a negative impact on the young themselves and the society. I fully agree
this
 and in
this
 essay I will clearly mention why I support
this
 idea. I agree that spending a lot of
time
 in the shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 is a waste of
time
 because
such
 places lack
from
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of
 useful educational areas.
In other words
, shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
 are filled with stores and many cafes and electronic
games
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game
 zones which none of them will add a positive to the young.
For
instance adding
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instance, adding
 a cultural zone or creating some useful events in the shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 will attract the young and introduce them to some useful things during the hours they spend there. So,
addition
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the addition
 of small educational zones to attract the young is much useful for both the young and the community they are living in. The statement is right the shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 might be threatening areas as a space for spreading diseases. The shopping malls are big closed areas and crowded most of the
time
 and the people are in direct contact with each other so any air prone disease is going to be easily transferred in
such
 areas and the younger people are
in
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at
 higher risk since their immune system has not fully developed yet.
For example
, these days the new
coronavirus
 which has been spread all over the globe and the shopping mall is a preferred zone because it is filled with virus
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 specie which is the human. In my opinion, going to the malls when it is for something important not for meeting a friend or to spend
time
in
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with
 because it is an area of infections. In conclusion, the Shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
 are not a suitable
places
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place
 for the young to spend their
times
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time
 in because most likely it have a bad impact on them as well as the society for wasting
times
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time
 in not a useful thing and they are crowded and might transfer diseases.

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