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some people think car-free day is an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are more effective way of doing. Discuss both views and your personal point of view.

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It is sometimes argued that whether an international car-free
day
 would lead to a drop of
pollution
 level effectively or there are more efficient methods of reducing
air
pollution
. Personally, I firmly agree the
second
 perspective, I think increasing the cost of driving a private
viechle
relating to or designed for or using the singing voice
vocal
vigil
 is a more practical solution. On the one hand, there are those who argue that international-car free
day
 is a viable solution for
air
pollution
 reduction, owing to the fact that there are numerous TV programs taking
this
 opportunity to promote environmentally-friendly driving tips
such
 as avoid sudden acceleration. Cities of Shanghai serve as clear example where since the car-free
day
 in 2004, 10,000 drivers have incorporated
such
 driving behaviours which has led to a a 20% drop in the
air
pollution
 level particularly carbon dioxide, a well-researched pollutant.
On the other hand
, there are those who believe that a more viable solution to tackle
this
 pressing issue would be making driving personal vehicles more, due to the fact that
raising
advancing or becoming higher or greater in degree or value or status
rising
 cost of gas or increasing road tolls leading to a drastic increase in the financial pressure on drivers.
Consequently
, drivers are now more willing to take public transit as a cheaper option. Studies conducted at the University of Toronto concluding that making driving 30% more expensive would result in an increase of 40% public transit rider contributing to a 25% reduction in PM2.5 levels. In conclusion,
although
 some people argue that international car free
day
 is effective for the enhancement of
air
 quality due to more environmental friendly driving habits causing a lower automobile emission rate, I strongly believe that adding more cost of private
viechle
relating to or designed for or using the singing voice
vocal
 driving would be a more useful method as it promotes using public transit.
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