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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an idea to accept the equivalent number of men and women in every course in some universities. Gender inequality is a pressing issue and different institutes try to pay attention to it. In my opinion, the considering concept will not lead to the solution. Nowadays male and female is able to get their education in all fields of study, so there is not restrictions for both genders. Choosing subjects have to connect with students' interests, not with an opportunity to show the tolerance.
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, some technical companies have the same rule: a half and a half of both sexes, but usually there are more applying men than women. It means, that some talented, perspective and more appropriate male candidate will not get the job, because men have the higher competitive
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, it is vital to cut down gender inequality and universities might help with it.
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, there are some female intellectual clubs, conferences only for women just to show that they are able to work and think at the same level as men do. In conclusion, there is a plethora of methods how to level the number of male and female in universities.
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, they do not have to constrain the interests of students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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