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some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. other believe that they should only allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give tou own opinion.

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When, it comes to learning, there must not be any discrimination an age, gender and religion as well.
it
Suggestion
It
 is believed by some people that there should not be any sort of
boundaries
Suggestion
boundary
 to university pupils regarding the
study
. Rather, they might
study
 as they want.
However
, some people think that, university students should
study
 science and technology related subjects. In my opinion, both views have their own worth. People
study
 plenty of subjects around the globe. Some students
study
 non-specific subjects and it has advantages.
Firstly
,
such
 kind of learners are multi-dimensional and they possess the ability to think out of the box.
Moreover
, those students are enough capable to discuss on any topic and they have a wider scope in practical life.
For example
,
such
 students can participate in the bureaucracy of the country which can be beneficial for their own future. Meanwhile, apart from some pros there are crones too. They do not have command on any particular subject,
although
, they have the knowledge, but superficially which can create problems. While other pupils should prefer to specific subject like science and technology. By focusing on a certain field, they tend to be more commanding in their area of
study
 and with that
such
 sort of of students are more technical and vigilant. Despite of having a limited scope of work because of finite
study
 in one specific subject.
Moreover
, they remain in a nut shell, and cannot exceed more than that. Conclusively, Either
study
 out of the box or remain only on technologies in both cases, they have their own advantages and disadvantages. Every individual has its right to
study
 whatever they want.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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