2-Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In the world a large number of sport stars

are attracted

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are attracting

have attracted

attract

attention to themselves, some teenagers applaud and follow them in media and social networks. I believe

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and has beneficial and non-beneficial effects on children and societies. On the one hand, many adolescents who are sportsmen or sportswomen’ fans have neglected personal traits them, their

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

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. For many years

famous sports

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a famous sports person

famous sports people

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has been exercising

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exercised

and achieved success. They must have discipline on their

work out

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

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and join a sports club and professional trainer train them. In a major or international match or Olympic, they suffer stress and some have taken performance enhancing drugs or acting dishonestly to get the result

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people in general

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, these are against the spirit of the game and gives the game a bad reputation. In

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situation, idolizing sports stars have dangerous impacts on young people.

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, I contend

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tendency could be helpful if only the teenagers ignored the negative and focus on the positive shape of athlete’s lives. Many Sports

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person

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people

persons

who can be good for ethical patterns and offer a moral lesson for teenagers to follow.

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, Muhammad Ali clay was an American professional boxer, activist, and philanthropist. His actions as a conscientious objector

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the war made him an icon for the larger counterculture generation, and he was a high-profile figure of racial pride for African-Americans during the civil rights movement. In conclusion, the talent and achievement of sports celebrities could stimulate youngsters to improve their potential

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abilities, but

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manner of acting or controlling yourself

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could have negative impacts on them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

266 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

admire
role model
excellence
hard work
dedication
cheating
misconduct
critical evaluation
guidance
positive influence
negative influence
inspiration

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2-Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets, many small local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays a growing number of people with health problems trying alternative medicine and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?