28. These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is a common fact that more people are migrating from developing nations to developed ones in order to seek for a better living
environment
for their children. Some people support that their decisions will benefit their children's growth; while, others believe that new living environments will bring drawbacks for their children. The essay will discuss the both views and presents my support to the former view. 
To begin
with, moving to a rich nation will provide a high quality of life for children.
Moreover
, harmonious communities, better educational resources, clean living
environment
with close-zero pollutions, and universal health care system in rich countries will benefit in children's development as well.
For example
, Chinese immigrants in Canada provide a safer
environment
for their children to grow well there. At least, in the current moment, their children are living in a society without being threatened by corona viruses. Their children have much happier lives in schools without facing extremely heavy study tasks as those in China.
On the other hand
, some people believe that relocating to an unfamiliar nation will bring negative impacts on the young newcomers. They will encounter with culture shocks, language barriers, different climates, lack of peers and social life etc.
In addition
, an unfamiliar living
environment
also
will have a detrimental impact on their cognitive capacity.
Finally
, they may suffer from psychological issues,
such
as depression or anxiety, due to inadequate supports from their communities or their parents who are
also
facing the similar conditions as well. In conclusion, I personally opine that emigration to rich countries will benefit the younger generation due to a better living
environment
.
However
, relocation will create challenges for children due to above reasons.
Therefore
, in order to prevent the drawbacks, parents should involve their children make the decision and start to prepare ahead,
such
as learning a new language, a new culture etc. befo
re the
Suggestion
Before
ir movement
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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