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In some countries increasing number of people are suffering from from health problems result of eating too much fast foods government should impose higher taxes on them on what extent do you agree or disagree with this

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It is a true fact that excess eating of Fast Food leads to various health issues by which people who are suffering from a height increasing
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 so the government must impose higher taxes on them. I defer to
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 with explanations. Out of all the reasons the form of one is that there are no essential and beneficial vitamins are there in junk food
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 of these needs of our body didn't get fulfilled by which efficiency of a body was getting decreased
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 so from that perspective government should charge Hai taxes on them.
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 the junk food take and a significant amount of time to digest rather than other green leafy vegetables, which somehow affect individual metabolism through various ways Especially for the kids who love to eat these kinds of food but don't know the application of
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, I would not overlook the other side too, begin with as foods like these don't take enough time to prepare so that would be a good breakfast or lunch for the persons who are in a hurry for their home for the work. Apart from
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 said that consumption of Fast Food occasionally in a month is ok but not for the daily basis.

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