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The diagrams illustrate Queen Mary Hospital at three different stages of its development: 1960,1980 and 2000. Overall, it is evident that the hospital increased its size over the period and
in addition
 to a new nursing
school
, a cancer
centre
 has been created and extended.
Hence
, the capacity of
car
 parking has been reduced by a half. In 1960, the hospital was built close to the main road and near to the shopping
centre
.
Furthermore
, a large area behind the hospital was turned into a
car
 park, while the backward area of the shopping
centre
 was
farmland
Suggestion
farm land
. By 1980, the shopping
centre
 was demolished to make a place in 2 different buildings, while one was used for the cancer
centre
 and other as a pharmacy.
Moreover
, the hospital gains the farmland and converted it into nursing
school
. In 2000, the main building of hospital and pharmacy remain unchanged, but the cancer
centre
 was extended to cover the entire nursing
school
. For
this
 consequence, the original
car
 park divided into two so that provides a small
car
 park and narrow nursing
school
.
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