Some people think parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

Since birth, every
children
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child
have
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has
has had
to take part of the
society
one day. In order to participate it, they need to be
educate
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educated
about customs, traditions, laws and more to become a good member of their people.
Nevertheless
,
this
is a controversial issue about who should apply to
this
task
. As far as I am concerned, I believe that
this
task
should fall to the
school
and its teachers with some help from their parents.
To begin
with, parents could educate their children about the
society
. They live with them most of the time and able to teach them about
this
. Even so, it is appeared that most of the parents fail to complete the
task
,
in other words
, these parents do not have enough time to look after their own children. Since, they have trouble with the economic recession, tedious
task
in their career, and the household spending, which push them to the edge and barely have time even for themselves of live with their own children.
In addition
, some of these parents is not good enough to be a model for their kids, as some of them support these youngsters in a bad way,
for example
, behaving aggressive, drugs, ill manner or disobey the law.
Besides
, many children choose to take some distance from their own parents due to their poor relationship.
On the contrary
,
school
is a place which design for
this
task
. As the government supported
this
institute, it has enough resources to educate them. Not only it has teachers who are trained for the job, but
also gather
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also gathers
has also gathered
a number of children which could be a miniature
society
for
practice
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the practice
. Yet, the
school
is not a sanctuary or save heaven for the children and might affect them in a bad way. It is infamous about the bully, incompetent staff and bad management. By
this
I mean, if the parents or
school
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the school
were left for
this
task
solely,
then
it has a high chance to fail to educate the youngster.
In other words
, the parents still have a duty to full fill what the
school
could not complete to prepare
these youngster
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these youngsters
for their future and
society
. \ In general, I think the most obvious answers is the
school
is the primary option for social education, while the parents can support their kids as a
second
. So as to, avoid bad habit or influence from each side and help
these kid
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these kids
this kid
to understand
society
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the society
around them. .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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