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some people support the developments in agriculture such as factory farming and creations of new types of fruits and vegetables, while others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Now a days due to the increase in
technology even
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technology, even
 the farming has modernised and became easy to grow the grains and
also
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 variety of fruits.On
this
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 new technique few people used to argue that it is better to grow fields with the new techniques
on the other
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hand some
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hand, some
 people used to
tell
express in words
say
 that
ancients
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ancient
 methods of growing fields is better than modern ones.Here in
this
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 issue I am going to put both the views and present my opinion on
this
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. On one hand, holding up the Positive side of invention of new technologies in fielding is beneficial in places where the weather conditions
does not support
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do not support
 fields to grow and
also
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 it is useful
at
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in
 places where water content is less or unavailable for plants to grow.In
such
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 areas the new farming techniques are extremely useful.
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, areas like
andhra
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Andhra
pradesh
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Pradesh
 where the rate of fields is very low and people use to buy vegetables and grains investing more cost.In recent year the average rate of grains that are produced in Andhra is 20
percent which
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percent, which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
health
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 because of less yield. On the flip side, People in some areas where they grow
enormously large amount
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the enormously large amount
 of yields every year and have sufficient raw materials to grow
them
people in general
they
 do not need any new science technology to do farming.People believe that by consuming the
food
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 which has grown by using scientific techniques will affect their
health
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 and cause various diseases.
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, a recent report
in
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on
 medical shows that 80 percent of people are becoming sick because of consuming
food
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 which is not grown naturally
.
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.
Their
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There
 are
lot
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lots
 of varieties
in
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of
 rice
itself
the thing named or in question
it
such
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 as Steam rice made
of
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by
 machines, plastic rice which looks similar to that of normal ones.If people
consuming
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consume
 these kind of
food
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 they will obviously
fell
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fall
 sick. In Conclusion, the new techniques of growing some
food
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is
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are
 really helpful in some areas and in some weather
conditions but
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conditions, but
 it is always better to consume a naturally grown
food
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 which does not harm our
intestine
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intestinal
 system as well as
health
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.In my view I always believe consuming
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health
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healthy
 and fresh
food
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 grown by natural process.

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