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Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree with these views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Advertising plays an important role to realize a targeted sales growth of popular
consumer
 goods and other goods as well. It shapes the degree of responsiveness of the customers of the popular
consumer
 products leaving a debate on the ground of whether the resultant high sales reflects
the real
Suggestion
reflect
 need of society or not. Considering the social, economic and political factors, which have a strong influence on sales-It is arguably not possible to agree fully with the statement that high sales of the products people need in their day to day life only reflect the power of advertising but not the real needs of society. In the market economy, sellers and buyers enjoy the freedom of choice bounded by the economic, political and social forces-rules, regulations, market imperfections. Producers try to reach customers through strong advertising, and in practice, they try to bias buyers to the products they want to sell. In many cases, people buy different popular goods tho
ugh they do
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goods, though
not need it.
For example
, mobile is a popular
consumer
 good. But, people, in many cases, being biased with advertisement, buy a good brand mobile phone though they do not need it.
This
 is the power of advertisement-though buying an extra mobile phone does not
serves the real
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does not serve
 needs of scoiety.
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
However
, in the cloud of different brands of popular
consumer
 goods, sellers needs to
reach
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need
 people. Advertising serves the need of a seller. Despite the presence of regulatory authority, many popular
consumer
 goods producers try to sell low quality product and to cheat wit
h cus
talk socially without exchanging too much information
chat
tomers. In developing countries like Banglades
h where institut
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Bangladesh, where
ions are not strong enough to minimize the degree of market imperfections-good companies face problems to sell their product. In
this
 case, advertising helps them to communicate with the community the want to reach. In
such
 cases, even to serve real social needs, advertising plays an signif
ic
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a
ant role. So, if a company can realize a high growth of sales, in many cases, it reflects the real needs of society. In conclusion, it is not possible to ignore th
e power of
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ignore, the
 advertisement. But, there is a scope of assessing the phenomena of high sales in the context of real social needs.
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