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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?

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The bar graph shows the types of addiction and their amount per
week
 by some specific families with
further
 classification by the number of dinners that families have together per
week
. Overall, it can be seen that families with less dinners together
use
 more substances, while families who spend more time eating dinners together consume less poisonous substances. Looking into the detail, 33% of families who eat 0-2 dinners per
week
use
 alcohol, 21%
use
marijuana
 and 15%
use
 tobacco.
On the other hand
, families who eat 5-7 dinners per
week
 consume a half quantity of alcohol (15%), a quarter of tobacco (4%) and almost one
third
 of
marijuana
 (8%) than families who eat 0-2 dinners together per
week
. 43% of families that eat every
week
 0-2 together have friends who drink regularly, while 33% have friends who
use
marijuana
 regularly. 29% of families that eat 5-7 dinners together per
week
 have friends who drink regularly, whereas 18% have friends who
use
marijuana
 regularly. 15% of families who eat 0-2 dinners together per
week
 would like to try drugs in the future, while only 4% of families who eat 5-7 dinners per
week
 are interested in trying drugs in the future.
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