THERE IS GROWING EVIDENCE THAT MAN-MADE ACTIVITIES ARE MAKING GLOBAL TEMPERATURES HIGHER. WHAT MIGHT BE THE MAN-MADE CAUSES OF TEMPERATURES RISING? HOW SHOULD WE DEAL WITH THIS PROBLEM? GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWER AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR OWN KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE

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role

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the role

of adverts in the society.

some

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Some

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that it

give

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gives

us the

products

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product

infomration

a message received and understood

information

which may be

benefitial

promoting or enhancing well-being

beneficial

to us, while I

argue that often

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often argue that

advetising

a public promotion of some product or service

advertising

leads us to purchase

product

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a product

products

which may be not required. In

this

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essay, I will discuss

relavent

having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue

relevant

reasons and five supporting examples. Examining the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

view, primary argument supporters would put forward is that

marketing deparment

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the marketing department

marketing department

of the companies

focus

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focuses

specific age group

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specific age groups

a specific age group

to increase their revenue. Adverts,

for example

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, contain

image

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images

of cartoons and chocolates which attract children to buy

chololates

compare critically; of texts

collates

or sugary products.

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lead them for the obesity in very young age.

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, there

are

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a plethora of

products

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product

marketing

such

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as pizza, burger or coke, could be unhealthy for one.

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, promoting the product might lead a person for the health related issues.

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to above mentioned points, there are many advertisings where one cannot confirm the facts. A good example of

this

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body cream

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a body cream

for

fareness

an agenda of things to do

fares

. In reality, no one can get

fareness

an agenda of things to do

fares

in just four weeks as shown in the promo. On top of that, multinational companies are using popular actors,

soportmen

someone who engages in sports

sportsmen

, or social media

influencer

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influence

to promote their products.

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kind of marketing

attract

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attracts

thier

of them or themselves

their

fan following and huge amount of the people. Each

influencer

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influence

has minimum of few

millon

(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units

million

follower

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followers

on social media platform and targeting

this

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group

has became

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has become

easy by posting a post,

for instance

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. To conclude, while many people vary

thier

of them or themselves

their

opinion about

this

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encouragment

the expression of approval and support

encouragement

from advertising, I strongly believe that none can verify facts and figures behind

this

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adverts

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advert

by seeing a minute video. These are just promos which could help

compay

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Compay

company

to increase their top line.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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THERE IS GROWING EVIDENCE THAT MAN-MADE ACTIVITIES ARE MAKING GLOBAL TEMPERATURES HIGHER. WHAT MIGHT BE THE MAN-MADE CAUSES OF TEMPERATURES RISING? HOW SHOULD WE DEAL WITH THIS PROBLEM? GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWER AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR OWN KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artist. To what extent do you agree?

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ● explain why you changed jobs ● describe your new job ● tell him/her your other news.

Some people say that humanitarian subjects such as philosophy, history and literature that people study in universities have no value for their future career. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.