You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Describe the problem you had with the tickets. Say why you were unhappy with the staff. Suggest what action the train company should take.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to inform you about a recent unpleasant experience I had with your train service.
Last
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week, I was travelling to Toronto from my hometown, Niagara Falls. A month earlier, I had booked a Go Train ticket through your official website and received a confirmation email.
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, when I reached the train station, one of your staff members stopped me from boarding and said my reservation was invalid. I showed him the confirmation on my phone, but he refused to accept it and asked me to leave the station. What disappointed me even more was the staff’s rude and disrespectful behaviour. He did not listen to my concern and denied my request without any explanation. When I asked for assistance, he ignored me, which made me feel helpless and angry. In response to
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situation, I would like to suggest that your website be regularly monitored to prevent
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glitches. Refund options should be clearly visible, and your staff should receive proper training in handling customer issues. I kindly request a full refund for my unused ticket. Yours faithfully, Pratik

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task achievement
Make sure you clearly explain your problem in detail.
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Use linking words to connect your ideas better, like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
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Try to vary your sentences and use more connectives to improve flow.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a good structure with a clear greeting and closing.
task achievement
You effectively expressed your dissatisfaction and provided suggestions for improvement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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