modern lifestyle mean that many parents have little time for their children.many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past.

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it is irrefutable for parents not working due to be
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working parents have difficulty to allocate more times for their dear
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
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the lack
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training children must be a highly debated
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issue
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and most psychologist highly recommended parents to spend more quality time with their
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
rather than quantity and their
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physical
physically
present in order to raise
prosperious satisfied generation
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a prosperous satisfied generation
prosperous satisfied generation
who can recall their childhood as the best carrier in their life.
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nothing seems more significant than raising a happy
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although
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most
parents
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parents'
concerns exclusively lead to their
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children
child's
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children
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firstly, they
must find the best
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approaches
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strengthen
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family bonds
the family bond
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as an occupied mother
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I totally agree to reduce my working hours to allocate more time for playing and communicate with my little daughter.
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simulteneously
at the same instant
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need enough kindness and attention beside
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money tray
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in regard to tackle children long-term mental disorder in the future, it is essential to find a way that has
more beneficial
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more benefits
for children`s life.
some
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of them have to tolerate
lonliness
the state of being alone in solitary isolation
loneliness
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the other hand
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,
most aspects of current
child
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has
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have
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a lot
of differences with past ones.
so
to a very great extent or degree
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wiser
wise
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example in
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the
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past, there
was no single
child
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or even single parent issues
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,
and most of them were taken care of by any member of extended family
such
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as own grandmother.
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conclude
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raising a happy
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,
satisfied
child
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is as hard as working in a mine
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and it will be worse
,
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,
if you
cant
can not
can't
have time management for their dearest one called a
child
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who need wise instructions and full support for own future life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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