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Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on different factors. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their life. Some individuals claim that
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while others have dissimilar views that we all consider as course of
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 there is a variety of factors why some people say that they can be derived a sense of satisfaction from earning money. Money is a basic desire in our lives that could be used to purchase everyday necessitates.
When person can
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When a person can
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.It is obvious that by earning money we might satisfy our basic needs.
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 due to the meaning which is different to each person. Nobody can totally understand what
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 there is a spectrum of basic needs that are considered to be
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the main factors
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 it is troublesome to be happy. Since it is considered as survival needs in our life
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Another supreme joy in life is our family members and friends as well. By sharing certain feelings and experiences, we are able to gain power which is vitally important in order to overcome barriers
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 In conclusion,
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 Since one has their own emotion about
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 in my
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perspective, happiness
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 is my family and my surroundings.

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