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television dominates the free - time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent then from socializing with others. do you agree or disagree?

#television #time #people
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Nowadays, The technology is coming
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 compare with relations. The
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 of Television, Internet, Gadgets is too high compared to previous decades. Television dominates too many people in their free
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.
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, people makes lazy and apart from that they did not even talking with others. I totally agree with
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 statement.
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, The behaviour of the people are changing of the more
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 of television in their free
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, sometimes the more
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 of
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, will be affecting them from the depression and stress. Many timepieces and reality shows may have great impact on the human's mind too. The effect from
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 is they get angry most of the
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 on their family without any reasons.
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, People do not
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 their free
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 for doing any physical activity to burn their fat or energy.
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 of that the waste their
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 on the television and get obese at the very less
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. They can
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 their free
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 in the gym
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. So that, they burn calories and
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 feel fresh from their busy schedule.
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, Their laziness are decreased by playing any outdoor games. They socialize with everyone and getting touch with them everyday unless they waste their
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 in any television serial and so on. To conclude, Television dominates free
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 of too many people, Which I agree surely and from that public get lazy and block them from socializing with others. I completely agree with
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