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More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, car and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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As the rapid global economy grows, it seems that buying famous brands with clothes, cars or other items become a trend nowadays. People are
more focus
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more focused
 on the brands of the products
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 of just the prices. I believe there are numbers of reasons that people are
favour
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favoured
favouring
 in buying goods or products with well-known brands.
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, most of people believe that products
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with
from
 famous brands have better quality and reputation.
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, Audi or BMW
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produces
 cars with elegant appearance and amusing spare parts, which are more appealing to customers than those unknown brand cars.
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, an increasing number of people are getting much richer than before, which means they are able to afford expensive and good-quality items. Some customers used to purchase cheap but less satisfactory goods just because of their limited budgets. Since people become wealthy, they are more willing to choose superior products with famous brands even though the prices are higher. In my point of view, it is a positive development
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of
 both individual and society. To start with, buying famous brand with clothes or cars is a symbol of high living standard. People can improve their
life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
 by consuming higher quality goods. They can judge products by the popularity of the brands
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 of simply choose
the cheap
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the cheaper
the cheapest
 ones.
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, companies and factories will try to manufacture their products more attractive by improving quality and reputation in order to maintain good images of them. In conclusion, the shopping style is influenced by many factors
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 as global
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economy
,
new shopping concept
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a new shopping concept
. I believe that people prefer to buy famous brands with commodities is a positive phenomenon since it represents an improving life standard.

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