Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people in the world listen to
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daily, regardless of their cultural backgrounds and ages. I partly agree with the opinion that
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is a good way to unite and connect people of different cultures and at different ages. The opinion has a disadvantage in the way that it is difficult for different kinds of people to bond with each other by
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since people's taste of
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varies according to their cultural backgrounds and ages. Even though English is becoming the world common language, people yet like songs that artists sing in their native language.
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, Japanese songs are more popular than foreign songs in Japan and Japanese songs always occupying higher ranks of
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usic charts
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the music charts
in Japan.
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, the young don't try to listen to songs released before they were born and
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the old is unwilling to listen to songs popular among young people.
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, accepting the disadvantage mentioned above, I would argue that
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has the power to bring different kinds of people together.
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indeed is one of just a few things
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people talk about with one another.
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can be a gate to the conversation and leads to another conversation topic, which makes different types of people open up to each other.
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, when I travelled to Thailand a few years ago, I get close to a pretty older local person for the reason that we had the same taste of
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. In
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way,
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transcends cultures and generations. In conclusion, while accepting the difficulty of bonding with people, irrespective of cultures and ages, in my opinion,
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can unite and connect people regardless of their cultural backgrounds and generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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