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Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources. Do you agree or disagree?

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Wildlife conservation should be given top most priority by any government while planning for expenditure budget. There are numerous
species
 like Cheetah and Bengal Tiger, which are on the verge of extinction due to the loss of their natural surroundings. It is disagreed that the efforts made in order to conserve the threatened living beings is a wastage of resources. Both the non-monetary and the monetary benefits arriving from restoration of natural parks and wild sanctuaries will provide the justification in
this
 essay. Natural surroundings like forests and deep jungles give shelter to the endangered
species
 and in these neighbourhoods, the air is fresh and free from pollution.
For example
, in the deep interiors of
Borivali National Park
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the Borivali National Park
, where the lions reside and the air quality index is one of the best in
city
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the city
, which
also
 aids in
reduction
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the reduction
 of harmful gases in the nearby surroundings and providing shelter to the needy beasts. So wildlife conservation helps in improving the general quality of life for all in the vicinity. Improving and developing the wildlife sanctuaries and natural parks will boost tourism and
hence
 develop the local economy, which is in-fact
a gain
another time, repeating
again
 of the resources.
For instance
, in
Madhavgarh National Park
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the Madhavgarh National Park
, due to restoration of natural parks, there was increase of
population
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the population
 of the local wild Bison, due
this
, there was an increase in forest tourism
thus
 benefiting the people in the surrounding area.
Thus
, it can be concluded that the efforts to save the threatened
species
 is more beneficial. To summarise the above mentioned points, efforts put in order to save the endangered
species
 is beneficial in both monetary and non-monetary terms and
Hence
, more steps needs to be taken in
this
 direction for the benefit of humanity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • preserve
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • ecological roles
  • conservation efforts
  • scientific discoveries
  • advancements
  • cultural value
  • aesthetic value
  • employment opportunities
  • local economies
  • ethical responsibility
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