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Nowadays, many people have to work longer times, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons ? What can employers do to make their life easier ?

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In the recent days, lots of people have to stay back post working hours leading to mental and physical exertion as compared to the older times. The reason is mostly because, their employers burden them with the exhaustive list of tasks. To deal with the problems, the organisation should keep them motivated by rewards and recognitions as well as little perks to delight them. In the competitive world, business centres thrive to achieve more in less period, in order to survive the market. Henceforth, the fact that they want to dig out more from their employees in a shorter term, they assign a huge to-do list of their workers which is difficult to achieve in the mentioned duration. Employees tend to spend most of their daytime working and stressing out hampering their personal and emotional relationships which cause them to isolate from the social world and making them stressful. The giant pharmaceutical company aspiring for USFDA approval of
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, pressurizing employees to work day and night to meet targets leading to stress and fear of under-performing. For the immense hard work and contribution of the staff members towards the organisation, the company owners should pay them off with extra cash or rewards and recognition. Sometimes, they should offer their employees with delightful perks like gift vouchers or a full holiday entitlement for relaxation. To keep in check with their mental and physical health they should build recreational centres at the premises. For an instance, Zydus Healthcare has a reputation of frequently organising sports and other extra activities to health check workers' mental conditions as they need them to be more work-oriented by providing more work-friendly environment. To overcome the stressful condition of employees, mostly felt due to work pressure on task completion, employers should repay their loyalty with job assurance, extra bonuses, perks and awards.
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