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Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. discuss both views and give your opinion.

#believe #people #leaders #leadership #skills
In recent
time
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times
, there have been separate views on
leadership
.
the
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The
first
 school of thought stands for, leaders birthed with traits while the other stands for leaders being trained.
This
 essay shall explain both stands. Though, I am of the opinion that
leadership
 skills can be
learnt
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learned
.
Firstly
, in biology, traits are transmitted from parents to Offspring
leadership
 characters are not excluded.
in
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In
Crenshaw University
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Crenshaw, University
, a research chain was concluded concerning
this
 topic and it was discovered that, offspring of prominent world leaders
come
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comes
 with a high degree of
leadership character
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leadership, character
 as well and need little or no training before the skills are exhibited. A prominent example of an inborn
leader
 is Rudolf Stern, a highly skilled Russian General who led and won many battles for the Russian resistance army.His Father was Vladamir Stern, an equally skilled military
leader
.
On the other hand
, leaders can be trained and bred.
because
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Because
, a child is considered a blank slate, experiences and lesson can mould them to developing certain skills, with Time and frequency of use, mastery is attained.A solid example of a bred
leader
 was Napoleon
Bonaparte who
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Bonaparte, who
 was a timid country Side Boy, but after passing through a series of trainings from the military, he became a renowned military
leader
 in France who had a ton of victories under his stint. In conclusion, both sides are valid and have their various evidences of
occurrence but
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occurrence, but
 I shall remain with the school of thought that agrees that
leadership
 can be learnt.
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