IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

IELTS Writing Task 2 Topics: Number 8. Some think that teenagers should follow older people’s rules. Others thinks that it is natural for them to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#ielts #topics #think #teenagers #people’s #rules #challenge #people
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is deniable that the teenagers love to follow their own rules. While there are some views that they must act as older people’s rule and the other believe they will defend against what the parents prefers. I think the children act independently is outweigh
then
 drawback and it will be described in the following paragraphs. It is so obvious that teenagers need close care and protection till they become mature enough to recognize the outweigh and drawback of their life. The disadvantage is that the children are not able to take care of themselves independently and they must protect by parents and other family members in the right way to prevent them from any possible risk or threat. Instance, it is important for the parent to know and upbringing, their child in style to feel confident in the society and build appropriate skills to communicate and deal
in
Suggestion
with
 the community.
Furthermore
, the teenagers would like to follow their own way and denied their parents’ rules. They are thinking the age gaps among two different generations. The experience shows that technology is going so fast and it will be updated day by day and impact the social and cultural lifestyle speedily.
For example
, now a day the teenagers prefer to read and write in the gagged
such
 a tap or smart phone stead of handwriting or reading a book. I am agreeing that the teenagers discover the world by their own methods and bring some new phenomena in the world. In conclusion, it is important to allow the kids to grow in their own method and protect by the older in some stages. I believe the outweigh is more
then
 draw back.
Submitted by aziza.baqery on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: