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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
• To collect the requirements from
Business
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the Business
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Analyst’s
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 and
preparing
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prepare
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 the
system
 requirements
document
 to analyze the functional specifications. • To create the required documents for each phase in the software
development
 life cycle mainly detailing functional and technical
design
 guidelines on existing mainframe
applications
. • Involve in
High
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High-Level
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Level
Design
 meetings and writing Detailed
Level
Design
Document
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Documents
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 and working on those to code the functionality for
system
 enhancements and
development
 activities. • Responsible for
development
/enhancement code changes of
applications
 &
batch
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and batch
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 programs using JCL, VSAM, CICS, COBOL and DB2. • Responsible for Unit, Integration and Regression testing using Expeditor as needed,
according to
 the technical
design
 written and to prepare test case results
document
. • To ensure
quality
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 of
project
 deliverables
to be
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 comprehensive, high productivity in the
team
 and meeting deadlines for all assignments by communicating
project
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the project
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 plan to
team
 members and client managers through meetings and presentations. • To communicate with the client if any critical error occurs during test runs and
discussing
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discuss
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 proper
solution
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solutions
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 with them. • To update detailed
level
design
document
 for any new changes / code added to the
system
 during a
project
. •To monitor batch scheduler by maintaining the production job schedule and
resubmits
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 failing jobs to ensure batch/report schedule is adhered to plan in order to maintain performance. • Troubleshoot the production issues and functional defects pertinent to
applications
 by fixing abends and resolving errors
on
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 coordinating with the onshore and offshore
team
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teams
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. •To monitor
performance
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the performance
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 and availability of hardware, systems, and
applications
 to ensure
system
 and application service
level
 availability objectives are met. •Working on creating Jcl jobs that will generate the test datasets from the production for the
development
 and
also
 effective handling of Adhoc tasks. • Taking ownership
for
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of
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 the
technical related
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 work and
project
-related activities independently and
deliver
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delivering
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 the
project
 within the time by coordinating
project
 deliverables. • Peer review and final inspection of various assignments that have been completed by the offshore
team
 before being sent to clients. • Co-ordination of
a
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team-wide initiatives
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team
-wide initiatives
such
 as knowledge management, Defect prevention, Automation and Innovation activities. • To prepare
project related
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project-related
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 transaction, audit, functional and dashboard reports that are forwarded to
client
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clients
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 on a regular basis.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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